Can someone proof read it for me? my english teachers insane..?

“The walk to high school” they called it, and as I walked across the stage last June at my eighth grade graduation I didn’t know what was in store for me. That long walk was directing me into my new phase in life. In that phase, I learned so much. Like how annoying it is when people just stop in the hall ways to talk, and when I realized that teachers won’t pass you for your own social benefit. The most important one though, was that I learned that when school starts, friends might not be the same when that school year ends.





Everyday I have the same schedule, and every day on my way to Algebra, I get stuck in the traffic. Just like in real life on the road, there are road blocks, and even though in the halls there are no traffic accidents, but there are the ever-so infamous people who stop in the middle of the hall and talk. This is by far one of the most annoying things a person can do. Not only do people scowl at these people as they walk by, but a lot of times they get picked on or other things. For your own sanity and you classmates sanity, don’t stop to talk in the halls! Why people can’t wait till after class I don’t know.





In elementary school and in middle school, teachers always seem to pass students who are disruptive and who don’t do that work. When those kids get to High School, they will be in a shock because in High School, if the work isn’t done, you’ll stay in that grade and class, till the work is done. Classes next year for the kids who failed will be filled with under classmen. Also when you’re older, the freshmen seem to be even more obnoxious, and being in a class with them would be terrible. Its not that hard to do work, just pay attention, and maybe your classes wont be filled with the fish’s we call freshmen.





Friends are irreplaceable, and they can influence who you’re going to be. In middle school friends are very much alike, but in High School, things change, and sometimes they change overnight. It’s not preventable, and you’ll find yourself changing. Some friends may move, some may follow a totally different crowd, some may ruin there lives. Who knows, maybe you’re the friend who may change. Changing is a part of life, and it may bring hardships, and tears, but it will bring more friends, smiles and wonderful memories that will never change.





High School life begins once you receive that diploma. It’s an ever popular time in a teenage life. It will be a change, and continue to change thru out your years, but its all worth it. Talking in the halls is a big No-No, and doing your work is a must if you want to move up with your friends to the next grade. Change is ineluctable, but it’s a tremendous thing all the same. Life in High School isn’t hard at all; it just takes some advice and some listening. Soon or a later, that walk to High School will turn into the walk into the rest of your life, and in High School, you’ll get ready for that walk.Can someone proof read it for me? my english teachers insane..?
WOW! That is fabulous! That must have took loads of work for you to do! I love it! and...I got loads of advice for High School. Thanks.





In the last paragraph ';soon or later'; it should be ';sooner or later';Can someone proof read it for me? my english teachers insane..?
Can someone proofread it for me? My English teacher's insane.





Start with that
1st paragraph: ';hall ways'; should be one word: ';hallways';


3rd paragraph: don't capitalize ';High School'; should be: ';high school';; ';under classmen'; should be one word: ';underclassmen';; ';Its not that hard to do work'; should be ';It's not that hard to do work'; (with an apostrophe, since it's a contraction of it is); ';wont be filled'; should be ';won't be filled';; ';fish's'; should be ';fishes'; (it's plural, not possessive)


4th pargraph: don't capitalize ';High School';


5th pargraph: don't capitalize ';High School'; (capitalize ';High'; because it's the start of the sentence, but not ';school';); ';thru out'; should be ';throughout';; ';its all worth it'; should be ';it's all worth it'; (contraction of it is); the expression that you've rendered as ';Soon or a later'; is actually ';Sooner or later';
At the end of the second paragraph, I'd change it to say:


I will never understand why people can't wait until after class.





Last sentence, 3rd paragraph: change fish's to fish (it's the same whether it's singular or plural) and put the apostrophe in won't.





In the 4th paragraph, there is spelled their (based on the context)





Last paragraph, make the last sentence start with: Sooner or later...
“The walk to high school” was the name for our eighth grade graduation ceremony. As I walked across the stage last June at my eighth grade graduation, I didn’t know what was in store for me. That “long walk” in 8th grade was directing me into my new phases in life where I learned so much. I learned how annoying it isto me when people just stop in the hall ways to talk. I realized that some teachers won’t pass you for your own social benefit. The most important one I learned was that when school starts, friends might not be the same when that school year ends.





Everyday I have the same schedule, and every day on my way to Algebra I get stuck in the traffic. Just like in real life on the road, there are road blocks. Even though in the halls there are no traffic accidents, there are what I consider the ever-so infamous people who stop in the middle of the hall and talk. For me this is the most annoying thing a person can do at school . Not only do some people scowl at these people as they walk by, but a lot of times the talkers get picked on and much more.. For your own sanity and your classmates’ sanity, please don’t stop to talk in the halls! Why people can’t wait till after class I don’t know. I know we each have our own needs and wants but let’s be respectful of others.





In elementary school and in middle school, it seemed to me that teachers always passed on students who were disruptive and who didn’t do their work. When those kids get to high school, I think they will be in shock because in high school, if the work isn’t done, I think they will stay in that grade and class until the work is done. I think classes next year for the kids who failed will be filled with under classmen. When you’re older, the freshmen seem to be even more obnoxious, and being in a class with them would seem terrible to me. . To me it seems its not that hard to do work, just pay attention, and maybe your classes won’t be filled with the “fish” we call freshmen.





I feel friends are irreplaceable, and they can influence who you’re going to be. In middle school I think friends are very much alike, but in high school, things change, and sometimes they change overnight. Often it’s not preventable, and you may find yourself changing. Some friends may move, some may follow a totally different crowd and some may ruin their lives. Who knows, maybe you’re the friend who may change. Change is a part of life, and it may bring hardships and tears, but it will bring more friends, smiles and some wonderful memories that will never change.





High school life begins once you receive that 8th grade diploma. It’s an ever popular time in a teenage life. It will be a change and continue to change through out your years, but I think it’s all worth it. I think talking in the halls is a big No-No. I think doing your work is a must if you want to move up with your friends to the next grade. Change is ineluctable (inevitable ) ????????????, but I feel it’s a tremendous thing all the same. Life in high school isn’t hard at all for me. For me it just takes some advice and some listening. Sooner or later, that walk to high school will turn into the walk into the rest of your life, and in high school, you’ll get ready for the walk of adult life..
In that phase, I learned so much. Like how annoying it is when people just stop in the hall ways to talk, and when I realized that teachers won’t pass you for your own social benefit.





At the end of the sentence, ';In that phase, I learned so much';, you should have a colon, and change Like to like, since you go on to tell what you learned.





Also, you need to tell what you learned instead of: ';The most important one though,'; you should replace one with lesson or thing, because it doesn't really make any sense right now.





In your conclusion, you have ';Soon or a later,'; and it should be ';Sooner or later';.





Other than that, its pretty good.