How to show a better message?

Can you please help me revise this paragraph, I want it to sound polite while having a strong impact on him. Also, I want it to sound less begging and more if he changes my grade he will be doing himself a favor.



This is the e-mail:



';I do not want to look back at this grade with agony and discomfort. This is my lowest mark I have ever received and it will hurt me dramatically in the future. Therefore, I would like for you to help me like you have helped my other fellow classmates who have talked so highly of you helping them.';



Thank you!How to show a better message?
'Agony and discomfort?' That's a bit melodramatic, eh?



How about, ';I do no want to look back on this grade with regret. This is the lowest mark I have ever received, and it will dramatically hurt me in the future. Therefore, I would appreciate it if you would help me. My fellow classmates have talked so highly of your services.';



Thank youHow to show a better message?
I might try this if I were you,



You are asking for help to get better grades, tell him that you don't think you can do it alone, you need guidance.



If you are asking him to help you increase your mar, tell him that this failure is no stepping stone, but a stumbling rock.



Be firm, confident, state why you DESERVE that help.



Good Luck and Lots of Cheers!!!!